Sri Aurobindo
Letters of Sri Aurobindo
Volume 1
Yes, the metre is very successful and the poetry very fine. I do not find any substantial departure from the original1 in your version. I compared the other translation also with the original today and that too is admirable. At the end of the third stanza there, only, you indicate (if I mistake not) as the supreme grace the joy of a heart touched by the divine, while in the Prayer the supreme grace is that of seeing or being the cause of another heart awaking to the Divine’s touch. But perhaps it is not necessary to stress it here as it is brought out in the second stanza.
Krishnaprem has been crowded out (and still is) by so many other2 things! It is not forgetfulness, but absorption and burial under Kanchenjungas that has prevented me from writing him up as yet.